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This took way too long to do. I had more plot to this chapter but it got edited out for some logical reasons. And then I needed to add more because the scene I cut was huge. Anyway enough with the commentary, unless you like it then I could do that for every chapter(maybe). Chapter...

Im confused. Did the guy toss a grenade into a cellar with a bunch of children in it? Did I read it wrong? Anyway it is a good story, continue it.

Thanks! The next chapters are basically outlined, its just a matter of making it all flow in the right way.

New Chapter for you all. Enjoy. Comments are swell. Chapter 5----Repercussions It was a cold dark room filled with a metal chair. It reminded Vic of the horror of Russian dentistry. Of course Russian dentistry did not have electro shock running throughout your body. Which was...

I wasnt a memeber back when you started writing so props to you for all your hard work.

Much better then the story I'm writing. Keep up the good work mate!

I was thinking of "Mice and men" the other day. Not for this story, i was just thinking about it. Anyway, thanks for the response. :)

another great response, thanks. The next chapter should help with the dialouge part. maybe. On theme, all I have to say is that it is early. What is written for Ch 5, goes more into a man vs self conflict, giving it more then just a basic action movie run-n-gun. I hope that clears that up.

thanks for the response. I try to find a good balance between dialouge and and action scenes. It still a work in progress on that aspect.

thanks for the response bud. And dont fear this story will go on for sometime.

Chapter 4 ----Tunnel Rats Another good hit and run today. We bagged about 6 or 7 CPs. Man I even know I took some of them out with my own gun to boot. Then the escape! Ha, I would have loved to see the faces under the mask’s of the CPs, as they found the house empty. They most be...

as promised there is more Chapter 3- The Hack crew- “I see you let some rebels slip away Vic, must be slipping.” “Not anymore then you are Jack.” “Nice. Anyway why you call me off patrol?” “Got some sewer sweeping for your crew.” “Fabulous Vic, f-ing fabulous.” “Hey it not...

Chapter 2-Wake up call- Trevor has to be the worst poker player in the world. Reading him has been the easiest job anyone has ever had. “You in or you out, in or out, in or out?” poked Alec. “Shut it already I’m…I’m… I’m…in.” Trevor announced. “Watch out now we got a player.”...

I thought i would give writing some stories a shot. The story is mostly focused on a team of metrocops in C17, roughly a few weeks before the events of hl2. Comments are welcomed. I'm new to writing stories, so things might not be clear or things might need more detail, but I need some...

The few gripes about the game I have is the lack of really intense gun battles. I'll admit the elevator in the basment was good and the hosptial squence was top notch, but the other areas seemed lacking in that regard and that is part of what Valve sold me on. Also the lack of new synths or...

Are you afraid of global warming, and its effects on Earth? Well never fear for the Universal Union is here! Never will you have to fear that global warming is melting the polar ice caps causing shoreline waters to rise and destroy that lovely ocean side property. We here at the Universal...

But i dont think the vorts are part of the combine though. Infact in my little theory they might never have been contact between the combine and the vorts/nihlanth. in other words the Xenians were just an independent race, like earth.

I dont like to post much, but nobody mentioned this one thing yet so ill give it a shot. Up till now I have always aussumed that the Comnine forced the Xenians to flee to Xen from their homeland. But based on recent news about epsiode one, specfically concerning a new third party, I began...

It has a good premise as it takes place after hl2 which is neato, but your chapters are very short There used to be a fan fic on this forum, before legal issues took it away, that had very excellent quality and it had good length. What you written so far impressed me, but you need more...

very cool info, thanks man