“All the Effort in the World…”

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“Good mourning Corporal Shephard, wake up. I must say my…employersss have not been…enthuse-iastic about me…detaining you Mr. Shephard, and I fear that they may be happy with the…assignment that I am sending you on. Good luck Corporal, you’ll need all you can get.”

Adrian opened his eyes as the headache subsided. A look around showed that he was in a helicopter, an open one. The sun was rising outside; a red sun. Adrian got the joke, though he didn’t appreciate it being played on him. He slowly rose, on a pair of stiff legs, and staggered towards the open door of his non-volitional transport. What appeared to be a ruined forest lay below, rotting. He occasionally glimpsed at life through the festering mess, though nothing he could identify. In the distance he saw a silhouette of something gigantic and vaguely familiar. Seemingly nothing Earthly.

With a sigh Adrian turned his head. There was a large town, or a small city, up ahead. The one building significant looking to catch his eye was what he assumed to be the town hack. The town was walled off completely, all towers manned, some guards shooting down at something below. As, what must have been, the destination grew closer, a man was shot off the wall by what seemed to be an absurdly large bullet and he realised what they were…and realised he had no name for them, despite having as many encounters as he would have liked and more with the lizards. As the helicopter passed over the wall Adrian could see what lay behind; a military encampment, seemingly stretching right around the wall. Then the helicopter started the decent.
“So, you must be that specialist…”






My first piece of writing not for school ever! \o/
I know some of you may feel that the g-man is out of character but meh
I used volitional in the right context didn’t I?
 
Write more before I can comment. :)
 
Good, but why G-man call him Mr.Shephard? He always called him Corporal Shephard...
 
Polaris said:
Good, but why G-man call him Mr.Shephard? He always called him Corporal Shephard...
*checks fanlist*
*edits*
 
I'm back :D
I have a bunch of ideas for this and now I must put them into a coherent story D:
 
ríomhaire said:
I'm back :D
I have a bunch of ideas for this and now I must put them into a coherent story D:
Go ahead, I want read this! :D
 
Too many "what he assumed to be", "what seemed like", "appeared like" etc. Don't clutter the language up with useless words.
 
^agreed^
Edit: OMG CrazyHarij, one post away from 7,000. :cheers:
 
“…I don’t see how the government can afford to be training people with all the shit that’s happening. I think they should have every man out here holding off these bastards. It’s ****ing ridiculous!”
Adrian didn’t respond, he was good at a few things, among them shooting, taking orders and giving orders, but not social skills.
“Anyway, we’ll debrief you and send you out. I hope you got enough sleep on the way here”

Inside the tent there was a group of combat ready soldiers, waiting though clearly impatiently around a table with papers scattered on it. What caught his eye was the large, dimly lit map. Unfortunately the name of the town was not on it.
“This is just for you kid, the others already know what’s going on and are ready to move out” Stroking his moustache that made it look like there was a hamster desperately clinging to his nose he began.
“We’re here” he said pointing to the map. Moving his finger up the map he continued “The lake is here. It’s infested with those…bullsquid things. Your job will be to go in and kill them all. The plan is to drop some chemicals that these things supposedly find poisonous. We think the area is clear of anything dangerous other that the squids themselves and those pit things but we can’t be sure so you’ll be going with a few hummers and extra weapons. You’re the Orange team leader…”




The next bit, finaly!
 
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