fugitives <--- working title

[crackhead]

hi
i got bored waiting for my script for a machinima project i was going to do so i started writing a different one that is set after that one but has more action in it. i need help with it critisism n stuff and also if anyone has any ideas for liek what happens next that would be helpfull. illl post it tomorow coz theres some things i want to change.

 

[crackhead]

ok here it is. be nice, ish.

ok 19 people have read it and no1 has said anything?

 

[Sloth]

firstly, take note that the views are only the amount of people that looked at your post. Not the amount that have read it.
Will read it soon, at school now.

 

[crackhead]

ok ive added to it and updated it alot. really could use the input