Neverending Nightmare

[Dsty2001]

NEVERENDING NIGHTMARE

Control is non-existant in this never ending abyss,
Like taming a wild animal without a whip,
All seems wrong and there is nothing you can do,
But sit back and hold on and hope it ends soon,
You fight for control as the demons fly out,
Control is not an option in this firey hell,
You finally wake up and all seems still,
The room is so dark but is not hell,
You go back to sleep with the fear of returning,
Goodnight and sleeptight, your nightmares returning..

 

[Fat Tony!]

errrrrr rriiiiight........... Not another of these threads better hijack it! So what do you guys think about doughnuts?

 

[Dedalus]

is it a parallel of our society? the world we live in?

 

[dawdler]

I have a neverending nightmare too.
It involves The Sims, a nudie mod and nonstop gaming for a year.

 

[Mr. Redundant]

ok nice poem, but I suggest using less influence from music, and slightly less repitition.
you also need to focus more on symbolism, its a better way of expressing both mental and physical visuals.
your rhyme scheme is slightly off and stanzas are a wee bit short especially for the "strain" you are trying to convey in your poem.
remember anguish can still be beauty.

keep at it.

 

[PvtRyan]

I have a neverending nightmare too.
It involves The Sims, a nudie mod and nonstop gaming for a year.

Mine involves 6 hairy midgets, a toe nail clipper and an 11 inch strap on. Dont ask....

 

[qckbeam]

Mine involves 6 hairy midgets, a toe nail clipper and an 11 inch strap on. Dont ask....

Oh don't worry, no one was going to...

 

[RandomPING]

Shouldn't this thread be in the hardware section?

Personally i'm a huge fan of donuts. They taste good!

 

[G-Dub]

Mine involves 6 hairy midgets, a toe nail clipper and an 11 inch strap on. Dont ask....

LMAO

 

[qckbeam]

So now that we are all talking about our worst nightmares, last night I had a good 6 or 7 terrible dreams. One was so bad that I woke up screaming (never done that before). So...yeah...I used to have night terrors, I'd walk around the house screaming and yelling, or I'd attack people when the entered my room while I slept. One time I almost punched my dad in the face when he came in to say goodnight...*ahem*, so...anyways...I'll get me coat...

 

[gh0st]

only 11 inches?