Part 1 of Foreordination plot

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During the year 1999, world peace was near. You had countries like the United States, Russia, France, Germany, Britain, and Australia all disarming all of their big missiles in an effort for peace. You saw countries like Israel and Pakistan; go for a period of 6 months without killing each other. All over the world people were laying down their weapons for peace.

On one cold November night, something happened that would change the world forever. They struck hard and fast, killing everything in sight, sparing no one, not even the children. We don’t know who they are, or how they got here. All we know is there not from this world.


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Thats part 1, plz comment on what you think, it sets up the alien invasion part of the story.
 
Honest opinion? Uhm... Moronic is a word that comes to mind... Well, sorry, but it is :)

It is not interesting the slightest. World is about to get peace then the nasty green boogymen attack and kill everything in sight... It lacks depth. And it lacks story. Which kind of says it all.

You said you wanted a comment on what we think, not nice comments ;)
 
Repetitive and unimaginative. You could have been a bit more articulate. And no country would disable their defensive capabilities. It is essentially, illogical. A treaty perhaps or a cease-fire but never really disarming entirely.
 
I realized that, and realized I can't write for shit. I wrote another story simliar, but that one was shot down when I asked a bunch of people. So there will be no story, just info.

There will just be 2 factions:
UMA: United Military Alliance
Info: Dominating power, controls most the world. Has commited a few attrocities, but tries to maintain order, peace, and justice.
DFF: Deing For Freedom
Info: A terrorist organization who will due anything it can to overthrow the UMA and avenge the freqent attrocities the UMA commits in its so called quest for "order, peace and justice".



For ai's there will be aliens instead of animals, because no ones wants to go hunt deer with a m60, where the fun...



I'm not very good with words, so if anyone is a good writer email me: [email protected]
 
My opinion:

Put Jean-Claude Van Damme in it, make him fly, and give him a big, curly talking moustache that can tell the future.




(I'd buy it)
 
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