Short Poem Thread

[Tollbooth Willie]

Well some times I like to try and write short songs that my friends can avtually perform well if they can find the right beat, and I was writing something for my profile on website. This is basically a poem to match my profile name which is The One Free Man in my blog. It's not really much but I would like some honest opinions and if you'd like you can post some of your work.

I am the bullet in the gun.
I am the rising sun.
I am the cure for the disease.
I am the one who can bring the enemy to it's knees.
I am a dealer of death.
I am the one who will fight 'till my very last breath.
I am the beast that constantly fights through the inside.
I am the one who wasn't there, when the rest of the the world died.
I am the reason why life has gone to Hell.
I am the one who will bring down the enemy using every last shell.
I am the one they depend on, the man of salvation.
I am the one who will surely bring about our liberation.
I am the one who can make reality right again.
I am the bringer of our freedom, I am The One Free Man.

 

[Dekstar]

I like your one. Good assonance too!

Hehe one I wrote a while back about CS (Still counts, right?)

*Rap beats start up*
You got OWNED!
I shot you in the face
before you even turned the corner
my crosshair filled the space - Between
your EYES!
Shine like a flaslight I pressed the trigger
BANG goes the gun, your death it grows nearer!
"OMG-Haxx!" I hear you cry, the high-pitch voice it deafens!
The Accusations flooding in as ownage rains from the heavens!
Then suddenly a HE-nade bounces round the wall,
"Oh shit!" I cry and make a dive
bullets spamming as I fall.
The wailing of the Tinnitus silences your moves
I cannot track your noisy feet
Like horses without hooves.
So I smoke-nade your ass out of there, and made your view turn black
A bullet's all it took from me to make your skull go *CRAAACK*
"BOOM HEADSHOT" *Fades out to nothing*

So yeah...

 

[Septih]

i like dekstars earlier work..

 

[Dekstar]

i like dekstars earlier work..

I know you are but what am I?

 

[Septih]

I know you are but what am I?

a little confused

 

[Tollbooth Willie]

a little confused

Quite RRY.