Teh Leet pOem

[Ikerous]

I hate english and anything to do with writing..
Therefore i obviously dont care for poetry

I have to write a poem for english
I wrote one but since im me, its complete crap

So, feel free to change/add/remove etc anything
In an attempt to make it suck less

Thanks for any help!
btw, happy april 20th :smoking:

The rain persists
It comes, and is feared
People seek shelter
Anywhere safe

The rain is not greated
Nor asked to drop by
Yet year after year
The rain will return

The rain brings life
It nutures and cleanses
Loving, yet detested
The rain persists

Wow.. after having read wtf i wrote.. i dont thihk this is make-better-able...
-_- ****ing english

::leaves to smoke a bowl::

 

[Sprafa]

you're a math genius and a poet...

wtf. We have another Fenric in the making.

 

[bvasgm]

Not bad, but I personally prefer mine. I call it: 'A Summary of HL'.
Scientists are good.
Things from outer-space are bad.
So is the ending.

 

[Jangle]

great poem, but i think you spelt greeted wrong..

 

[MarcoPollo]

BABADFadfnkafekneg kaef k OMG that poem is teh l3357 1337 71nge eve|2 but its still teh butt awesome!!!!1111






Don't know where that came from........good work.

 

[xLostx]

I'm not gunna lie, I didn't read it. On the plus side, cake is good

 

[Ikerous]

I had cake earlier
And pizza
And cookies
And froot rolls
And fruit
I was hungry.

Oh yea, we're supposed to be insulting the poem ><
Not complimenting it
Its complete crap, make it better!
my internet just died for like ten minutes..

 

[ne0_shiny]

wow
that sucks so much!
it would be much better if it went like this
Ikerous cant write poems
But if he got a cheese nip
Then he could eat it and get a new IP
After that he could go to the store and buy ship!
Skippity fwip!
Dip!
Schlip!

(just doin what he said to do)

 

[Ikerous]

wow
that sucks so much!
it would be much better if it went like this
Ikerous cant write poems
But if he got a cheese nip
Then he could eat it and get a new IP
After that he could go to the store and buy ship!
Skippity fwip!
Dip!
Schlip!

(just doin what he said to do)

Hmm.. I dont see that making it better.. ::Glares::
Although the cheese nips do sound awful good...

::just woke up from a nap:: :tired:

 

[Pressure]

Wow, seriously that poem was pretty bad. Try using a rhyme scheme. Something like:

A
B
A
B

C
D
C
D

or

A
A
B
B

C
C
D
D

 

[Ikerous]

Yea i was never fond of, or good at rhyming...
Make it rhyme for me ^_^ :thumbs: Plz?

 

[Zeus]

Wow this guy is gonna be the next shakespeare

 

[Murray_H]

The rain is not greeted
Nor asked to drop by
Yet without its return
Our rivers run dry

Just a small alteration, it would be better if you found a word to rhyme with return or greeted

 

[Ikerous]

Just a small alteration, it would be better if you found a word to rhyme with return or greeted

Heey, i like that ! :thumbs:

::Gives you uber special good job cookie::
I had cookies earlier... now i have a stomache ache :|

 

[ne0_shiny]

Just a small alteration, it would be better if you found a word to rhyme with return or greeted

What?
No!
Mine is way better with its random non-rhyming words!

/me changes sig

 

[Murray_H]

Heey, i like that ! :thumbs:

::Gives you uber special good job cookie::
I had cookies earlier... now i have a stomache ache :|

Can I trade the cookie for some maths help?

If A = B x C x D

D = A / (B x C)?

I'm rubbish at rearranging formulas

 

[Ames]

Can I trade the cookie for some maths help?

If A = B x C x D

D = A / (B x C)?

I'm rubbish at rearranging formulas

After that:

(D x B x C) / (B x C) = A / (B x C)

Cancel B and C out:

D = A / (B x C)

 

[Laivasse]

Cool, this is a homework thread now?

Your poem is nobcheese, BURN IT. In return for that constructive crit, could someone knock out about 2500 words about space manipulation in Japanese city planning throughout history? Ta.

 

[Ikerous]

Aw, i missed out on doing a math problem!
that sucks.. i missed out cuz i was in math clas though..
So i guess it makes up for it
(I love how like for the next 24 hours after smoking pot, math becomes uber easy..)

And wow.. your sig is like my sig with my name in it.. thats weird..

 

[Ennui]

Today was a massive blur of hunger, bright yellowish lights and sharp vision, laughter, sleep, and smoke.

you should add "Ennui loves me." to your signature Ikerous. You should. Because I do.

hmm, I've still got an hour and 40 minutes until 4/20 is over... I'll be back later.

 

[Ikerous]

Today was a massive blur of hunger, bright yellowish lights and sharp vision, laughter, sleep, and smoke.

you should add "Ennui loves me." to your signature Ikerous. You should. Because I do.

hmm, I've still got an hour and 40 minutes until 4/20 is over... I'll be back later.

I smoked everything i had
I'm glad to hear you had a good 420!
Best holiday ever.

 

[Ennui]

It would save a lot of absences if they just let us out of school today :|

 

[Teh_Poet]

The rain persists
It comes, and is feared
People seek shelter
The vacation is smeared

The rain is not greeted
Nor asked to drop by
Yet without its return
Our rivers run dry

The rain brings life
It nutures and remedies
Loving, yet detested
The rain stays as it will please

How about this? Not great, but maybe...

 

[Ikerous]

How about this? Not great, but maybe...

The end seems a bit weird sounding..
I might tweek that a little
But thank you!
Definitely an improvement ^_^

 

[Teh_Poet]

If you want more rhymes for 'remedies', there's also "Japanese" and "chronic obstructive pulmonary disease"

 

[BabyHeadCrab]

I'm not gunna lie, I didn't read it. On the plus side, cake is good

lol, best post of the day award