New tutorial, city17 video message.

[cnexs]

Hi everybody, now im done with my tutorial on making the videomessage in city17
in the tutorial there will be:

• Making a monitor connected to a camera.
• Making a microphone sending and sampling sound to/from specific points.
• Adding a sequence to an actor.
• Lots ´n lots of outputs.

You can find the tutorial here.

http://hem.bredband.net/b331535/tutorials/monitor/index.htm

If you find any misspelling or bad grammar, or if anything is very difficult to understand.
Please state it here.

Keep on learning // CnexS

 

[Dead-Inside]

I suggest you bold out some "important" areas of the text to make it easier to read.

Above that, it looks good.

 

[silentbob]

it looks great! too bad you cant do it in CSS

 

[Dead-Inside]

I know the monitor/camera's doable.

 

[Raeven0]

White background, yuck! Barely readable

You should use paragraphs instead of a newline after every sentence.

The plural of logic_relay is logic_relays, NOT logic_relay's. (Concordantly, the plural of light is lights.) Apostrophes never, ever indicate plurality. I won't go any further into the grammar than that, unless I see that you misused "it's" or something...

It's intelligible, though, and that's the most important part.

 

[cnexs]

ok, changed the background, dont think it's the final color ive just borrowed two colors from this forum .
Splitted it up into 10 diffrent sections, only found one "logic_relay's"

and now its got a vaild xhtml 4.01 strict and css

 

[ent|ty]

Thanks for the tutorial. This will come in handy for upcoming map projects of mine