Saruke
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Hey everybody this is your chance to dish on me and flame me as much you want but on one condition:
It has to be about the following story and has to be based on some sort of evidence.
I repeat I am not looking for compliments I'm looking for ways to improve upon myself.
"One, two, three, all green, ready for insertion."
"Roger that, now withdrawing core cooling rods 4, 5 and 6."
"Belay that last order Sam! Cooling rod 1 is showing an anomaly, integrity is compromised."
"Roger, reinserting cooling rods 4, 5 and 6."
"Captain looks like were not going to be able to go to hyperspace yet, we need to swap out one of the frakkin' cooling rods again."
"Understood, oh and crewman Riley."
"Captain?"
"Watch the language, this is a starship not a cantina."
"Uh, sorry, sir. Won't happen again."
The comm fell silent and the two men slowly began to relax in their chairs.
"You know when we finally finish this job I hope the captain?s going to finally get one of those greasers to fix up our engine. With all the mileage we've racked up in these past few months, she can't even make it to hyperspace anymore!" growled Sam, giving his console a little kick.
"Easy man! This baby's gotten us through more scrapes then I can remember, besides, I want to hang onto that money until we get back to Subruul," Riley gave Sam a mischievous grin which was answered with a roaring laugh.
"Ahahaha! I admit, that does have a certain appeal!" Sam managed to get out between gales of laughter.
*
The bridge of the Argo was quiet, too quiet. Captain Rivas knew the benefit of order on a ship and made sure it was enforced but a feeling of dread tickled the edges of his mind. As if every step they took towards their goal was another step to their destruction. Hugo's familiar gravely voice broke him out of his contemplation.
"Repairs on the hyperdrive cooling rod are under way Captain."
Rivas turned to face Hugo. The men had been wary when he chose a Gromarl as his first officer but in the five years since he had been with them Rivas had never had a more dedicated and loyal officer, never mind the fact he didn't have a face.
"Captain is something the matter?"
Rivas grimaced, "It?s our client.... Ever since we took his job, I've just.... I just have a bad feeling is all."
Hugo cocked his head slightly, "Feeling? I do not understand your meaning."
Rivas grimaced, "Never mind it's not important, Pull up the star chart our client gave us so we can plot our next jump."
"Of course Captain."
Hugo moved silently over to one of the consoles and input a few commands, and in a swirl of light a larger then life map of galaxy appeared in the center of the room.
With a nod from Rivas Hugo input a new command bringing up a new magnified projection of the sector they were currently in.
"We are currently orbiting the 4th planet of a star system listed in the records as... Chiss."
Rivas' eyes narrowed intently, "Estimated time to the target?"
Hugo was silent for a moment, "If we do not have any more core failures we could reach the planet in two days."
Rivas let the relief show on his face, "It's amazing that after so many months in hyperspace we are this close to our destination."
"If you pardon my intrusion Captain, why are we heading to...." Hugo paused to read the system information, "The Arroyo system? My study of the map shows it to be one of the most remote places in the galaxy."
Rivas' frown deepened, "I asked our client the same question when he first met me."
"And?"
Rivas shifted uncomfortably, "He said 'to reclaim what was lost.'"
Hugo hummed softly, "This new client of ours seems to like his secrets."
"I have a feeling your right and I also think that whoever our client?s looking for is in a frack load of trouble."
One last thing, I'd appreciate it if you could think of a better fake curse word.
Peace!
It has to be about the following story and has to be based on some sort of evidence.
I repeat I am not looking for compliments I'm looking for ways to improve upon myself.
"One, two, three, all green, ready for insertion."
"Roger that, now withdrawing core cooling rods 4, 5 and 6."
"Belay that last order Sam! Cooling rod 1 is showing an anomaly, integrity is compromised."
"Roger, reinserting cooling rods 4, 5 and 6."
"Captain looks like were not going to be able to go to hyperspace yet, we need to swap out one of the frakkin' cooling rods again."
"Understood, oh and crewman Riley."
"Captain?"
"Watch the language, this is a starship not a cantina."
"Uh, sorry, sir. Won't happen again."
The comm fell silent and the two men slowly began to relax in their chairs.
"You know when we finally finish this job I hope the captain?s going to finally get one of those greasers to fix up our engine. With all the mileage we've racked up in these past few months, she can't even make it to hyperspace anymore!" growled Sam, giving his console a little kick.
"Easy man! This baby's gotten us through more scrapes then I can remember, besides, I want to hang onto that money until we get back to Subruul," Riley gave Sam a mischievous grin which was answered with a roaring laugh.
"Ahahaha! I admit, that does have a certain appeal!" Sam managed to get out between gales of laughter.
*
The bridge of the Argo was quiet, too quiet. Captain Rivas knew the benefit of order on a ship and made sure it was enforced but a feeling of dread tickled the edges of his mind. As if every step they took towards their goal was another step to their destruction. Hugo's familiar gravely voice broke him out of his contemplation.
"Repairs on the hyperdrive cooling rod are under way Captain."
Rivas turned to face Hugo. The men had been wary when he chose a Gromarl as his first officer but in the five years since he had been with them Rivas had never had a more dedicated and loyal officer, never mind the fact he didn't have a face.
"Captain is something the matter?"
Rivas grimaced, "It?s our client.... Ever since we took his job, I've just.... I just have a bad feeling is all."
Hugo cocked his head slightly, "Feeling? I do not understand your meaning."
Rivas grimaced, "Never mind it's not important, Pull up the star chart our client gave us so we can plot our next jump."
"Of course Captain."
Hugo moved silently over to one of the consoles and input a few commands, and in a swirl of light a larger then life map of galaxy appeared in the center of the room.
With a nod from Rivas Hugo input a new command bringing up a new magnified projection of the sector they were currently in.
"We are currently orbiting the 4th planet of a star system listed in the records as... Chiss."
Rivas' eyes narrowed intently, "Estimated time to the target?"
Hugo was silent for a moment, "If we do not have any more core failures we could reach the planet in two days."
Rivas let the relief show on his face, "It's amazing that after so many months in hyperspace we are this close to our destination."
"If you pardon my intrusion Captain, why are we heading to...." Hugo paused to read the system information, "The Arroyo system? My study of the map shows it to be one of the most remote places in the galaxy."
Rivas' frown deepened, "I asked our client the same question when he first met me."
"And?"
Rivas shifted uncomfortably, "He said 'to reclaim what was lost.'"
Hugo hummed softly, "This new client of ours seems to like his secrets."
"I have a feeling your right and I also think that whoever our client?s looking for is in a frack load of trouble."
One last thing, I'd appreciate it if you could think of a better fake curse word.
Peace!
