The Complete Works of Teh_Poet

Shamrock said:
You spelled lose wrong. In line 3, it should be spelled 'lose' and not 'loose'.

Nonetheless, great poem. I like your work. :)
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No, I mean loose, I would write 'let loose' but that would make it too bumpy...
 
Back on topic...also this thread should be called "The complete works of Teh_Poet featuring Marcopollo and the formnite experience"
 
MarcoPollo said:
Back on topic...also this thread should be called "The complete works of Teh_Poet featuring Marcopollo and the formnite experience"
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I am no madman, I tell you, I simply have a highly carved and whittled sense of smell...
 
Teh_Poet said:
I am no madman, I tell you, I simply have a highly carved and whittled sense of smell...
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We're not paying you to make no sense. GET BACK TO THE POEMINGING'\


edit:TDE is back as of like 3 days ago! w00t
 
MarcoPollo said:
We're not paying you to make no sense. GET BACK TO THE POEMINGING'\


edit:TDE is back as of like 3 days ago! w00t
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TDE?


Every time you’re near,
Heaven comes a little closer.
Whenever you loose a tear,
It crawls farther away.

And every time you leave,
A darkness comes: enclosing.
Is our love naive?
I feel something opposing.
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Not many changes, but I think it's a small improvement...
 
I like it...btw TDE = the dark elf (highest post count former mod, artist)
 
Okay, my latest work is going to have a group of comparisons, so can you try and give me good qualities of the following?

Her voice

Her eyes

Her hair

Her words

Her beauty
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MarcoPollo said:
Angelic
Majestic
Golden
(her words?)
Unrefined
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Good, good...

If it helps at all, most likely it'll be comparisons to "nature's things", such as a mountain, river, ocean, etc.


I'm going to bed now, cya next morning
 
Her voice - Soft
Her eyes - Majestic
Her hair - Silky
Her words - Inspiring
Her beauty - Overwhelming
 
Sorry, I probably worded it wrong.

I meant I need things to compare to each of the qualities.

Example-- Her eyes are like a tornadoe, tearing through me....
or
Her hair is like a river, flowing from its source.
 
Her cry is of heaven's rain,
Her eyes of ocean's blue.
Her hair whisps from dusk's domain,
Her beauty of angel's new.

Edit - Ooh I went and done hijacked your thread! Anyway...what type of poetry are you doing?

Thesaruses work gewd for neat words. As does Diablo II (you'd be suprised by the variation of badass words; aegis, leviathan, ect.)
 
Her voice, an earthquake.
Shaking my entire life.
Causing my heart to ache,
Causing an added strife.
 
I've read most of your work, quite good and depressing.
 
Her eyes, two black holes,
Sucking in my mind.
Something collides, our souls,
Our souls which are entwined.
 
I got poems too, Im a teh_poet as well...



Bush
O bush why do you dispair
Stealing oil thats not fair
Go somewhere else were your appreciated
Why dont you crawl to the devils lair.

Me
I am Max
I dont not hax
in a matter of facts
I you that program called VAC.

Tests
I hate tests
they are evil
I try to do my bests
But fail and I fall behind the rests.

Corn
I like corn slathered in butter
I start to eat and if some one intterupps I mutter
I get and climb and shut the shutters
I really like corn
OUCH! This one had a thorn...
 
^ :laugh:

reminds me of a "poem" in an old Cracked magazine

i'm so bored
i'd pick up the phone to call lisa
but i can't get myself
to order that pizza

(it was something like that)
 
Her words, an inconsistent breeze,
Blowing through my head.
She can hurt me with such ease,
She knows not the tears I’ve shed.
 
MarcoPollo said:
shmozy, why aren't you banned yet? anyways thnx, teh.
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cuz shmozy went to valve last august and hes cool, and btw he was only joking :P teh_poet is a great poet.
 
Teh_Poet said:
What kind of thinks compare to hair?
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Feathers, corn-fields, straw, silk ('cause THAT'S not a cliche), knitting wool, shoe laces, silly string, TV cables, trains, Lichtenstein.
Now I'm just thinking about how sexy hair is. Grrrrrr...
 
Which is better,

Her words, an inconsistent breeze,
Blowing through my head.
She can hurt me with such ease,
She knows not the tears I’ve shed.
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or

Her words, a broken symphony,
Blowing through my head.
Sometimes it will let me free,
Sometimes more tears I shed
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I got poetry 2...

Ahem,

As I type this silly poem I think, "is this usefull or plain stupid" yet I dont care
somtimes people can be a pain when they make fun of your hard worked poems.
As I go on the rooftop drenched in rain thining "should I jump?".

Theres a bum on the street.
As I walk out on concrete in the sleet,
I know im going to give him change
but that bum looks too deranged

I know my poems suck
say it again and i'll hit you with a hockey puck
you better run now
before i make you go pow

I am winning
I am pwning
I am getting bored
so im gonna watch indiana jones aka harrison ford (GET OFF MY PLANE!)
i am slightly tired of life
so im getting up to get a knife
oops i fell over a can
poked my eye on a crayon
im feeling better now
hey look CT took a pow.

:dozey:
 
Her words, a broken symphony,
Blowing through my head.
Sometimes it will let me free,
Sometimes more tears I shed

Go with that one, but change the last line - seems too contrived, like "Hnnngggh... Must... Make... Rhyme... Uurrrrgh."
 
Her words, a broken symphony,
Blowing through my head.
Sometimes it will let me free,
Sometimes it cages me instead.
 
Teh_Poet said:
Her words, a broken symphony,
Blowing through my head.
Sometimes it will let me free,
Sometimes it cages me instead.
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That's a great set of lines.
 
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