Its Almost Done!

[pharamir]

I am almost finished my map dm_outpost17. It has a bit of everything, a bit indoors, outdoors, hiding places etc.

 

[Dasparov]

heh, looks pretty fun

 

[Danimal]

Did you use source for that map?

 

[darrenstraight]

Beter than mine!

 

[pharamir]

Did you use source for that map?

yep source was definitly used why?

 

[Danimal]

I tried to make a funny =/

 

[pharamir]

oh well good try, any suggestions though?

 

[ComradeBadger]

My suggestions:
Work with your texturing.. the walkways look very wrong. Also, that room looks out of scale.. and very bare
Everything looks waaay too random.. there's nothing tying things together-try and have a unified theme
And make a proper ladder, that one just looks out of place

 

[pharamir]

Hey thanks for the tips, im gonna remove that walkway on the column it doesnt work at all in the map. the walkways do look iffy dont they, i may make them solid. Changed the mountain texture, retextured the floor in that room, cause it looks a bit stretched.

Heres an indoor screen shot in the building with the lettering on the top.

The feel is more unified once you play it, but i will try and make it a bit more unified, the idea is kinda of a last outpost for the combine, so it has a few defenses etc.

 

[ComradeBadger]

Again, room looks randomly out of proportion.. remember the player is only 72units high.

Also, the lighting seems a little random.. I'm not sure..

 

[MigaS_tX]

There are some good parts, and a lot of horrible parts. Those rooms must be smaller, and with more obstacles! Read this, please!!!! And what's that ugly thing in pics 2 and three?

Improve it till you reach perfection!

 

[Maxi]

Those screenshots are insanely big! Could you make them smaller please?

 

[genocide604]

I have a question, when does this contest end??

 

[pharamir]

Again, room looks randomly out of proportion.. remember the player is only 72units high.

Also, the lighting seems a little random.. I'm not sure..

Thanks for the tip on the room size, i reduced it, and the empty room is now an archive room with solid walkways with an embedded pyrotechnic cupboard, which is a nice touch.

There are some good parts, and a lot of horrible parts. Those rooms must be smaller, and with more obstacles! Read this, please!!!! And what's that ugly thing in pics 2 and three?

Improve it till you reach perfection!

I know exactlly what you mean the cylinder is there but the ugly walkway thing is gone.

 

[MigaS_tX]

This one.
It's a great map IMO.

 

[pharamir]

This one.
It's a great map IMO.

Do you mean the texture or the guard post thing. Cause i changed the texture it looks 100% better lemme get a new screenshot.

 

[Neutrino]

It looks way to blocky to be honest. It's not a bad start though.

 

[pharamir]

Thanks for the help everyone, heres a new screenshot from the "archive room. And a screenshot from my first map, which was made 6 weeks. Im quite pleased to see how much better my skills have improved.

can't believe how dark it is lol.

 

[ComradeBadger]

I'd still say it doesn't gel.. it's a combine outpost.. the fine-geometry static_props contrasting sharply with the blocky rest of map. Also the lighting seems very random still :|

Sorry.

 

[pharamir]

thanks, i don't im going to continue on this map, it was purely to improve my skills. I've move on to something a bit moring challenging and innovative. http://www.halflife2.net/forums/showthread.php?p=1162150#post1162150

 

[ComradeBadger]

Woah woah. Don't walk before you can run

 

[Cukel]

Just a quick thought, im not a mapper myself, but would it be possible to make one of the pipes explodable or what-was-the-word-again, you know, like in that one map in Water Hazard. Err. You get the point, right?

 

[pharamir]

pipes?