Zombie Master!

[Hectic Glenn]

I should clarify - that doesn't mean that ZM will be out in seven days. That is absolutely not the case.

Did you catch it?

I should clarify - that doesn't mean that ZM will be out in seven days. That is absolutely not the case.

How about that time?

I should clarify - that doesn't mean that ZM will be out in seven days. That is absolutely not the case.

Surely that time you did.

7 days will fill you with enough knowledge to be ready for when Zombie Master comes about, just keep your eyes and ears opens, simple as. GRAVES JUST DON'T! hehehe!

 

[Maxi]

If you think that's odd, you wanna see blair witch project!

Anyway, The question is. Are we gonna hear tony get MUNCHED ON!!!

I did see that too. That too was odd.


Anyway, look at all the fuss I've caused. Neat.

 

[Insano]

?!?!?!?!?!?!?

http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=lombardi'd

 

[Boogymanx]

http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=lombardi'd

That made me LOL
EDIT: Where did all the non-media go? Or is it just my FF acting up?

 

[Insano]

New tape available!

Text:

Tony Swan, November 3th, 8:15 PM

Collin has gone missing. It seems that overnight he must have just got up and left. I'm worried about him. This isn't like him at all. We searched the town forely and there is not a trace of him here. He didn't even take our bus. Duan said she said saw lights and so at the church last night. We had a quick look this morning. We had a quick look this morning, but there is no sign of any chance. Something really odd is happening, and I still can't shake the feeling we're being watched.

 

[Boogymanx]

Something REALLY odd is happening...
ZM is scaring me now :<

 

[Ennui]

You'll scream like a little girl when you turn a corner and run into six fasties hungering for your flesh.

I know I do.

 

[Crispy]

Collin has gone missing.

It seems that overnight he must have just got up and left. I'm worried about him. This isn't like him at all. We've searched the town thoroughly, and there's not a trace of him here. He couldn't even take our bus.

Joanne says she saw lights and silhouettes over at the church last night. We had a quick look this morning, but there's no clear sign of any change.

Something really odd is happening. And I still can't shake the feeling we're being watched.

A few corrections.

 

[SpArKs]

http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=lombardi'd

I did actually try looking up lombardi, but all i came up with was A member of a Germanic people that invaded northern Italy in the sixth century A.D. and established a kingdom in the Po River valley. Also called Langobard. Or some American football coach

 

[Sloth]

I'm at school, so i can't listen to them now. So where / will there be an archive of the audio files so i can listen to them later?

 

[Ennui]

on the site if you click the forward and back buttons on the player it goes through all the files

 

[Sloth]

Thanks, havn't had a chance to get on, cheers. Will dump waste unexpectedly when i hear them tonight.

YAY- Listening to the first one now.

Well worth the wait,the best hype yet.

 

[Boogymanx]

No non-media update for today?

 

[Garfield_]

is there any media at all for this ?

 

[63]

is there any media at all for this ?

There are tons of screens in the other zombie master threads...

 

[Garfield_]

i wanna help zombie master team >=

 

[63]

I think you have to be part of their hentai club.

 

[Beerdude26]

I think you have to be part of their hentai club.

I see :O
Now replying to PMs for certain sites :naughty:

 

[Angry Lawyer]

As they say - D:

-Angry Lawyer

 

[Crispy]

New audio log, new speaker!

This is the audio log of Steve Maddison. Saturday, 5th of November 10:12 AM.

Tony went missing for six hours and we just found him. He was walking about in a daze outside the church. We just can't seem to get any sense out of him.

I really don't like this place. We're being watched, but from where I just don't know.

Still no sign of Colin, but, with Tony how can I get him to respond? His eyes are glazed and he just seems to be staring into space.

Something has frightened him, and it sure as hell is frightening me and Joanne right now...

My only criticisms of all these tapes is that the word 'seem' seems overused (pun intentional).

His eyes are glazed and he just seems to be staring into space.

'To stare into space' as an expression of the English language does not mean extraterrestrial space, but more simply an empty area. Tony probably was staring into what those around him perceived as an empty space. I think it would have created a stronger image if the 'seeming' had been omitted, as it would give the reader a stronger reaction to Tony's absent-minded behaviour. If someone was distracted for a moment, you might describe them as having seemed to have been staring into space. By using the word 'seem' you not only make the action of staring into nothingness less believable for Steve Maddison, but also for the reader because of the first person narrative. When an audience reads/views texts written in the first person they are forced into a closer empathy with the narrator(s). Other phrases can be used instead of the word 'seem' which work more closely with this reader-narrator empathy.

His eyes are glazed and he looks like he's just staring into space [the whole time].

The word 'look' encourages the audience to visualise the situation and bring themselves closer to the action. To strengthen the effect "the whole time" or a similar phrase can be used to tell the audience that he is fixated on something that his friends cannot see, his eyes never leaving what they perceive as space. When 'seem' is used the audience is told that they should doubt the supposition that he is 'staring into space' to some extent.

 

[Sui]

Crispy- is it just me, or have you just stepped out of an English lesson? It sounds like you're writing an essay for the sole purpose of displaying your newly expanded vocabulary, rather than explaining how the word "seem" distances us from the character.

Firstly, this isn't a story or a narrative- we didn't "act" any of these. We actually found these tapes in an abandonned car, on the outskirts of London. They're authentic. Blame "Steve Maddison" for overusing the word "seem", not us.

Secondly (I'm going to describe this like it is a narrative, seeing as you were doing the same), the word "seem" is frigging SUPPOSED to distance you! That's the whole point! Tony Swann, this person we've come to know over the past few tapes, and the only soul we can trust; has seemingly gone insane. when it's mentioned that he's "staring into space", this isn't a fact; just a speculation. Steve doesn't really know what's happeing any more than we do. the word "seem" just creates an air of mystery.

By the way, "His eyes are glazed and he looks like he's just staring into space the whole time" Isn't a well thought out sentance. firstly, the word "looks" just conflicts with "the whole time"- I mean, does it only look like he's doing it the whole time? In that case, could it be only half the time? In fact, the phrase "the whole time" just doesn't work at all- it feels like it's just been tagged on (which it has). It's not even in a relative context; you can't just say "the whole time" on it's own without actually defining the amount of time you're reffering to.

When 'seem' is used the audience is told that they should doubt the supposition that he is 'staring into space' to some extent.

He probably isn't staring into space. In fact, I wouldn't be suprised if Tony Swann is looking directly AT something... but none of the other characters can see it.

 

[Pi Mu Rho]

New audio log, new speaker!


My only criticisms of all these tapes is that the word 'seem' seems overused (pun intentional).

His eyes are glazed and he just seems to be staring into space.

'To stare into space' as an expression of the English language does not mean extraterrestrial space, but more simply an empty area. Tony probably was staring into what those around him perceived as an empty space. I think it would have created a stronger image if the 'seeming' had been omitted, as it would give the reader a stronger reaction to Tony's absent-minded behaviour. If someone was distracted for a moment, you might describe them as having seemed to have been staring into space. By using the word 'seem' you not only make the action of staring into nothingness less believable for Steve Maddison, but also for the reader because of the first person narrative. When an audience reads/views texts written in the first person they are forced into a closer empathy with the narrator(s). Other phrases can be used instead of the word 'seem' which work more closely with this reader-narrator empathy.

His eyes are glazed and he looks like he's just staring into space [the whole time].

The word 'look' encourages the audience to visualise the situation and bring themselves closer to the action. To strengthen the effect "the whole time" or a similar phrase can be used to tell the audience that he is fixated on something that his friends cannot see, his eyes never leaving what they perceive as space. When 'seem' is used the audience is told that they should doubt the supposition that he is 'staring into space' to some extent.

Hello, Captain Overanalysis.

 

[Crispy]

Crispy- is it just me, or have you just stepped out of an English lesson? It sounds like you're writing an essay for the sole purpose of displaying your newly expanded vocabulary, rather than explaining how the word "seem" distances us from the character.

I have done some literary criticism as part of my degree and while it's not important to analyse every word in literary commentary it is important to analyse words that are repeated throughout the text. These non-media releases are audio texts and a lot techniques for literary criticism can be applied to it such as analyses of the use of vocabulary and use of pauses (the audio equivalents to the comma, full stop, colon, semi-colon and suspension points).

Firstly, this isn't a story or a narrative- we didn't "act" any of these. We actually found these tapes in an abandonned car, on the outskirts of London. They're authentic. Blame "Steve Maddison" for overusing the word "seem", not us.

WHAT? In that case why bother defending points that I've made if they have no basis? It's like defending a country that isn't there.

Secondly (I'm going to describe this like it is a narrative, seeing as you were doing the same), the word "seem" is frigging SUPPOSED to distance you! That's the whole point! Tony Swann, this person we've come to know over the past few tapes, and the only soul we can trust; has seemingly gone insane. when it's mentioned that he's "staring into space", this isn't a fact; just a speculation. Steve doesn't really know what's happeing any more than we do. the word "seem" just creates an air of mystery.

In most cases this is true, and I like the way it's been used so far, but in this case I feel it's not as good a word to use as others. I was giving feedback. I didn't know that was a crime.

By the way, "His eyes are glazed and he looks like he's just staring into space the whole time" Isn't a well thought out sentance. firstly, the word "looks" just conflicts with "the whole time"- I mean, does it only look like he's doing it the whole time? In that case, could it be only half the time?

No. In this case 'look' would mean the same as 'appears', but with the added benefit of bringing the audience closer into the world by letting them better live the story.

In fact, the phrase "the whole time" just doesn't work at all- it feels like it's just been tagged on (which it has). It's not even in a relative context; you can't just say "the whole time" on it's own without actually defining the amount of time you're reffering to.

The expression 'the whole time' would be used to imply a long, but clearly defined, period of time. In the example this is the period beginning with their recovery of Tony Swann and ending in the present. The expression 'the whole time' gives the impression that Swann has been acting this way continuously up until the present, regardless of whether Maddison has not been watching Swan the whole time. It's a perfectably acceptible English expression and what's more it would seem not to look out of place if used by Maddison's character, judging by his accent.

He probably isn't staring into space. In fact, I wouldn't be suprised if Tony Swann is looking directly AT something... but none of the other characters can see it.

This was precisely my point. The text does not directly ally itself to the author's intended meaning, assuming that you didn't find these tapes in a car.

Finally, it was a piece of advice for your writer. There's really no reason to react so aggressively. All I wanted to do was point out one tiny area that could be improved, as I can't see much more that could be. It's exactly the same as giving feedback on placements of props in a map, so I don't see why you kicked up such a fuss.

P.S. I just noticed the correct spelling is Swann, and have edited my posts to reflect this. Unless you really did find these tapes in an abandoned car outside London and you're just educatedly guessing that that's how it's spelt.

 

[Solaris]

Vist #care on irc.quakenet.org for more info tbh.

 

[Angry Lawyer]

Finally, it was a piece of advice for your writer.

I'll take it in mind.

Also, consider that these were recorded without a script, rather with cue-cards.

-Angry Lawyer

 

[Pi Mu Rho]

We don't have a "writer".
It's not "literature".
You're reading far too much into it.

 

[SimonomiS]

Vist #care on irc.quakenet.org for more info tbh.

Theres me, Q, and some guy called slowmotion_ in there. I don't see any info.

 

[Crispy]

Also, consider that these were recorded without a script, rather with cue-cards.

Ah, that's fair enough, and makes them all the more impressive

 

[Sui]

Wait, how have we managed to generate such a huge argument over the simple word "seem"? I mean, if you really want to analyse the audio log, SURELY you can find more to critisice than just one word. The fact that you were making such a fuss over a tiny word like that just implied you were looking for things to rant about, rather than giving helpful critisicm. It seems I was mistaken; now you say you were "giving feedback" rather than just trying to look intelligent.

 

[Solaris]

Theres me, Q, and some guy called slowmotion_ in there. I don't see any info.

Lol.

Tell me what does # mean is the world of 1337 haxoring, it means don't.

So visit dontcare at whever.org. The funny thing is you have a #before a channel name in irc anyway.

 

[Solaris]

ha suicide 42 fell for it too!

 

[Sui]

...What?

 

[Solaris]

Lol there was some guy in #care called Suicide, thought it was you.....it wasn't, your too pr0 too make that mistake.

 

[DiSTuRbEd]

Guys settle down before I lay down the law.

 

[63]

Time to abandon this thread and create a new one!!1

 

[Insano]

Leave the sinking ship!

 

[Sulkdodds]

Never.

 

[CyberPitz]

I shall keep quite in the back of the ship until it is NECESSARY for me to jump.

*hop*

 

[Angry Lawyer]

Wankers. I hate you all.

-Angry Lawyer

 

[houndeye]

Paw! Paw! There'w's a big ruckus outside, and... and... I think Tony got et, paw!

Edit - Best one yet, BTW.